It was a hot day in Houston. Ava had a avid to have a birthday party tomorrow. She wanted to emulate this party known as “White Party”. Ava’s plan was for everyone to be swimming during her party. The day her birthday was going to be celebrated, a flame came out of no where from her backyard. Ava and her guests were upset. The party ended being cancelled… the party of the year was ruined. However, Ava’s dad, Joseph, planned another party for her so she wouldn’t be upset. All in all the party kept on going like nothing happened.
Did anything else happen to her house?
Good job on your story Alexia! Poor Ava, she didn’t get to have a first good party. Anyways, there were a few errors. For example, you said, “Ava had a avid”, i believe you should have changed it to, Ava was avid to have her birthday party tomorrow. Also, you needed a comma after all in all. Other than that, you did great!